Blog #10-Group Analysis

Andrea
Shana
Kelsee
Generra (absent)

Question:

What features of the comments give information for the the revision of the paper?

Coding of the Comments:

Sample Writing Guide with Comments:

1. No negative comments, but positive feedback.
2. Supports the student in a positive manner.
3. Encourages the student to keep writing and edit where necessary, without being aggressive.
4. Gives examples of sources that can be used.
5. Explains what needs work and follows up with how to "fix" the revision.

Sample Process Narrative:

1. No negative comments, but positive feedback.
2. Supports the student in a positive manner.
3. Encourages the student to keep writing and edit where necessary, without being aggressive.
4. Gives examples of soucres that can be used.
5. Explains what needs work and follows up with how to "fix" the revision.

These two samples seem to be written by the same professor. The comments are not negative, but give the student a direction of where they should go.

Sample #3

1.  No negative comments.
2. Gives advice to write a stronger introduction and conclusion.
3. Gives positive feedback and comments (good interviewing).
4. Provides questions for direction of paper. Comment number 3.

This is another sample that is quite similar in style and fashion of the two first samples. It seems to have the same format as above. The comments do not seem to be negative, but give the writer a sense of direction. The questions that are asked also help guide the student on where to go and how to proceed with the paper.

Sample #5

1. Good comment to start with, positive feedback in the introduction.
2. Grammar comments are a little to much-crossing out, adding, deleting, etc.
3. No explanation of changes-penmanship to hard to understand.
4. Gave other word choices-positive feedback.

This sample had to many comments on grammar and not enough on how to fix or what direction to follow. There were to many sentences crossed out and questions that were not easy to understand.

Sample #6

1. Positive comments-introduction side comment on paper.
2. It gives comments on how to correct problems.
3. Words added to make the sentences flow better-positive comment-solemn in paragraph 3.
4. Encouraging the student with the end comments.
5. Gave positive suggestions.

Unanswered Questions:

How does the writer feel reading the comments?
Are the comments positive or negative?
Do the comments help?
Do the comments confuse?
What are the similarities between the comments? Are they written by the same professor?